Hello This is a critique for the #FeedbackFrenzy Week! I'd like to start off with saying, that I really like this piece. It stood out to me amongst the other pieces, and I was instantly drawn towards it. I enjoy still life photography and I see some really nice pieces in your gallery!
What I see here is an old and vintage pocket watch flowing in the open air. It's almost as if I can feel it moving and hypnotizing me as I write this. Your colour scheme is really powerful but still subtle. The golden watch is in great contrast to the green bokeh-background. However, I wish that the whole watch was in focus and not just the bottom. The golden reflection on the bottom is beautiful and intriguing, but the chain from which the watch hangs is out of focus, and I feel it would have worked better for the whole expression of the picture, if it had been standing out more. Sadly I'm unsure about it even being possible without changing the angle. The chain creates an effect where a part of the picture is blurry and I feel like I'm already going under as if I was being hypnotized.
I'd suggest that when want to take these kind of pictures, be aware of the light on the setting. Here, I feel that the light is hitting the top of the watch in an unlucky way, so it creates a very strong reflection.
These images can be super hard to nail, because the angle is untraditional. Either one can place oneself in an awkward position in order to get the desired picture, or one can let the watch dangle from side which I think is the desired effect of this piece. Especially moving targets are tricky to catch, and that's sometimes the great thing about still life pictures. It's when you can sense movement! I think a position such as this: [link] would have worked better for your golden pocketwatch because the whole watch is sharp and very detailed. Many photographers has tried their take on the infamous pocket watch, and *lieveheersbeestje has done a lot of these kinds of images, for example this one: [link] where the angle is directly onto the subject. This way the whole watch is in focus and is in great and sharp contrast to the rest of the picture. The thing to be careful of if you want to try out for this kind of picture as *lieveheersbeestje is the background. It can easily get boring! You remind me a lot about this deviant. Maybe it's the similar avatars, but also your galleries are very similar in key aspects!
Your picture is anything but boring, though and this is truly a great photograph. I hope you will keep taking such pictures in the future, and I hope this was somewhat helpful for you! Please keep in mind, that these are my personal opinions, and that I only am a photograph-hobby-enthusiast and not a professional photographer
If you have any questions, please don't be afraid to ask me to elaborate or go even further into my statements and the rating, I've given.
Hello! First of all, I let you know that this critique will enter the :FeedbackFrenzy:'s comment contest As a still life photographer and pocket-watches freak myself (XD) I love this picture! But let's take this step-by-step The composition is very nice, I like it! The fact the clock isn't perfectly centered makes it look better, and gives the idea of movement. The colours look very natural and subtle, I can pereceive a lovely vintage atmosphere. The dark green together with that light brown are a very good combination. The depth of field is almost perfect. I see you used a very low aperture, and the bokeh that way looks bigger and - in my opinion - nicer. I love that kind of bokeh in the background And the watch is on focus, which is a hard result to achieve when it's swinging back and forth. I like the fact the upper side is a bit fuzzy, though, because it really helps to create the "motion" effect, which, looking at the title of the picture, I assume you were aiming to. The angle is quite unusual for a photograph like this, but I think it works pretty well ^^ The perspective looks original and overall awesome. Now, I have just a few critiques for this piece. Although it doesn't really bother me, I would have used a bigger aperture: all the clock face would have been clearer and focused, and the bokeh wouldn't have been too small however Also, I think there is too much light on the upper side of the watch, it looks a bit overexposed. Sunlight sometimes can be a problem with glassy surfaces... But I guess you couldn't avoid it with this angle, though. And, last but not least, sorry for the low rating in "originality", but you know, we all seem to love pocket-watches and this subject is becoming banal I like your picture, however, and you made it look more original with the execution, despite the subject isn't at all. That's a great thing I really, really appreciated your photo: it has a great quality and it has a good impact for sure! Keep up the awesome work, you're talented!
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Nice Photo ,, I like the general concept of this piece , The angle of shooting is creative The look of Bokeh is also good I belive that it's better to increased the aperture to bring the whole object into focus ... In general , this photo is stunning
I have been itching to critique your photos! However time has really been an issue so I find myself last minute critiquing D:
Anywho! I adore that watch I want to know where all of these deviants find such wonderful still life subjects, I should probably paroose some antique shops more often. I really love this picture, The motion is captured so well I'd love to know how you did it, the way the clock slowly goes out of focus you can sense the motion. The background, in my opinion, is perfect its there but not distracting away from the subject the perfect amount of bokeh! I think the only thing I would like diffidently is the lighting on the top of the clocks face, its a little over exposed and I wish it could be a little darker but the picture is so well done I don't really think it takes away from the picture at all. Wonderful job, you have earned a favorite from me!
Firstly, I LOVE stop watches and have seen many similar photographs across not only deviantart but the internet in general but what really sets them apart is the overall image wuality and exactly how the image is executed and here it is executed brilliantly!!
The macro-esque small D.O.F. used here is perfect to create this very magical type atmosphere where all our focus is on the little pocketwatch, maybe a slightly larger depth of field would have worked nicely here as the numbers towards the top of the watch are slightly out of focus which is a shame when it is the focal point of the image. One thing I particularly like is how the aperture settings have created a lovely bokeh background that is very natural and beautiful with the green tones and the lovely LARGE size of the bokeh gives us an amazing background in general, giving us the sense of time falling away naturally all around us every second of the day. I love that you've decided to use this as a landscape framing too and how the watch is slightly off places to the left I only wish it were slightly MORE to the left and so fitting in to the rule of thirds - perhaps you could achieve this my cropping the image in slightly. The angle of the watch is another thing very worth mentioning. I'm not sure if this was achieved from simple angling the camera or if the watch was actually in motion but the angle of it makes me think of it as though it is swinging like the things in the huge grandfather clocks.. swinging to every second and so the sense of movement makes me think that every moment, time is going by and we're falling out of out lives slowly into older age etc. And, perhaps a strange thing to comment on, but I like the placement of your watermark balancing out everything that's going on in the top left by placing it in the bottom right. One thing I personally would've changed would be to try and either use a higher shutter speed with the lowest ISO or so on to try and keep all of the watch surface at a reasonable light level because its a shame that it's slightly over exposed towards the top of the watch which I know can be quite tricky to NOT have when dealing with reflections in glass but it just slightly bothers me that the numbers are harder to see at the top so maybe experiment with angles or even just changing your camera settings slightly can make a huge difference to this.
Overall this piece is gorgeous though and I can see from your artist comments that you obviously LOVE to take photographs of watches and with time concepts and you've definitely got a talent for macro photography ^-^ I will definately be looking through your gallery now ^-^
Hi, I'm writing this on behalf of #FeedbackFrenzy. (However, all opinions stated are my own.)
First of all, I like the angle you shot the clock at. I also like how you used a shallow DoF to make the clock stand out and make the background creamy smooth. This piece speaks to me, it says "time is ticking and you better make the best of that time." I also like the color of the background, it makes the piece seem calm and relaxing.
Some things to consider: The clock is in focus but it isn't really that sharp. I would experiment with different apertures until you find one which still blurs the background and makes the clock sharp. Other than that, there is nothing else that I could see improved in this photo.
i like this piece very much cause when i first saw it, it reminded me about how the time is passing by and that we can't turn back the clock it made me a bit sad and melancholy this piece resonated with me and i think that it's great, that's what every artist want to do, doesn't it?) i like the round shape of the watch and i aslo like that on the background there are some repeating round shapes in lights (i'm sorry for my poor English and i hope you understood what i meant ) i have no suggestions about what to improve, i'd just like to conclude by wishing you good luck nice photo, you should be proud of this piece of work!
I love pocket watches! The focus is brilliant in this. I love how the focus fades into the chain. I also love the bokeh as it really makes the pocket watch pop out. I also really like the lighting. Everything about this is just beautiful. Very nicely done!
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Now to your photo : I absolutly love the concept and the mood of this photo ! The overall look is almost dreamlike and really beautiful
The first think that came to my mind when i looked at the background was : no noise even though it is such a dark background !? Very well done ! Apart from that, the big bokeh fits really well and the simplicity of the background make the clock, as the main focal point, really stand out. The pocket watch itself is really beautiful and fits the old mood of the photo very well I also like the perspective, the viewer doesn't look at the watch frontal but in a slight angle, which is really nice and remarkable ! One thing that is somewhat disturbing is the focus on the clock. The focus is set on the clock but doesn't capture it completly: Personally i would use a little higher aperture settings so that the whole clock is sharp
But overall this photo is really amazing and you are a great photographer ! Keep up your good work and have a nice day _________________________________________ i am sorry for any grammatical or spelling mistakes